WIP: Story in One Paragraph

I've never  attempted this sort of thing before,  I prefer to just write, but you have to keep trying new stuff, keep learning so here goes . . .


Story in One Paragraph


1 paragraph, 5 sentences, 3 disasters and an ending . . .

First Version . . .

In the magical city of a thousand towers, the son of its greatest lord is about to be wed. But when he is framed for the murder of a maid and the mutilation of his brother-in-law to be he must flee for his life. In desperation he seeks refuge in the lows, the city's dangerous slums. Even as he struggles to come to terms with his new surroundings, he knows he must find out who framed him, but when the city's assassins are unleashed the only way to stop them is to become one himself and eliminate whoever is responsible for his troubles. So he goes on the offensive only to find out it is his own brother behind the plot to destroy him.

Second Version . . .

Lembek, the youngest son of the City's greatest Sorcerer, is on the cusp of adulthood but before he joins 'society' he must face the death-test and, perhaps even more worrying, marriage. On the eve of his wedding party he is framed for the murder of a beautiful young maid, and must escape. He escapes to the lows, the city's deadly slums, but soon finds himself hunted by the fearsome Gort, brother of the murdered maid. He only just convinces Gort of his innocence, and makes an ally of him, when Croakers, the infamous assassins of the lows, start to hunt him through the slums. Lembek and Gort turn the tables on the Croakers and start hunting them, determined to find out who is behind their attacks. When he finally tracks down the King of the Croakers Lembek is devastated to learn that it is his own family that wants him dead. He and Gort set out to do what no one has ever done before: fight their way from the lows and up into the Great Tower, where Lembek will confront his family and prove his innocence or die trying.

Third Version . . .

When the novel's finished I think.